Tom's Bad Day With His Snake

WALT make up a story about a Pet Day problem.

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• Begin with an orientation to tell the reader who, did what, where and when.

“Pet Day will be on Friday,” Miss Anderson, Tom’s teacher, announced to the class on Monday. “Bring your pet to school and tell us about it, then we will have a pet parade.”

Tom was so excited. He would be able to bring Harry to school to 

show everyone.

• Write the events leading up to the problem.

At the end of the day, he ran all the way home to get his pet ready for Friday.

He loved Harry and had wanted to show his friends for a long time, but his mum and dad had told him that Harry must never leave the house; but, now, his

teacher had given him permission to bring it to school.

Smilingly, he polished Harry’s green silky skin, talking to it with his friendly voice. “You’re allowed to come to school, Harry. You can meet my friends and my friends can meet you.”

As soon as Friday came around, Harry carefully took Harry out of its cage and placed him into his black backpack. He couldn’t wait to get to school, so he ran

all the way.

When the bell rang, he and the rest of the class stepped into the 

classroom.

• Write the problem.

Tom opened his backpack to show his friends what he had brought to school for Pet Day.

“It’s a green, slippery, slimey …...................” he said slowly. “Snake!” he 

shouted.

“Tom Denver, give me that thing right now!” Miss Anderson 

commanded.

Tom opened his hand to pass it over, but, at that moment, naughty Billy Burton lunged to grab it himself. He bumped Tom’s shoulder and Tom hurtled forward, the snake flying out of his hand to the back of the classroom.

“Eeeeeee! Where is it?” squealed Miss Anderson.

Chaos threatened in Room 4.  Children jumped up and ran around, screeching

their lungs out and pushing over chairs and desks, trying to find Tom’s snake.

• Write the events to tell your readers how the problem was solved.

Miss Anderson was mad but, suddenly, Tom had a solution. He asked his friend, Johnathan, to get some food so he did.

Tom stood behind Harry and, with a big HISS! Tom let go.

Everyone was screaming their lungs out.

Tom yanked Harry. He struggled as he was trying to hold on. He was frightened. He did not want to get told off any more.

Everyone was happy.

"Right!" roared Miss Anderson. "You will not bring Harry again!"

Everyone agreed with a big ‘yes’.

Tom smiled and sat down at his tall desk.

Well done, Mischa. You have written some interesting sentences, especially in paragraph 4, where you explained to us how Tom was feeling.